I am clumsy and uncoordinated
Always taking a while to adjust to new things Tripping and falling over almost everything Because I am unaware of my surroundings Clueless and always confused But without a doubt I never fail to get back up Learning from my mistakes Taking a while to improve But slow progress is still progress Usually having a short attention span Moving on to the next thing that interests me My mind is always moving Thinking about one thing And a fraction of a second later, thinking of something else Trying to find the one thing that will keep my attention Forgetting most of the things that don’t But other times, I will remember what I want to I remember what makes me happy Things that are worth remembering Naturally filled with empathy Understanding the feelings of others Reacting to their emotions Sometimes without them having to say a word Being able to notice something is out of place in a short amount of time Wanting to be playful and make them feel better But knowing when to be playful and when to sit there and listen Willingly showing and proving my loyalty To whoever I am comforting I am a puppy
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Daniel Jose
1/30/2018 02:47:20 pm
I like how you explained things in all 3 stanzas. However, It didn't seem like a poem at first because I wasn't sure what your metaphor was. Your poem should have a title or you should put the metaphor at the beginning of your poem.
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Kayley Lau
1/30/2018 02:50:30 pm
I liked how you spread out all your characteristics throughout the poem and for the most part didn't use ordinary words but you should add more metaphors because I couldn't really tell which lines were metaphors.
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